So, for my first submission, I got some pretty good feedback and wasn’t really advised for improvement. This time around, I must admit was a little bit more challenging considering I am under the weather. In my opinion, I believe my first elevator speech was much better; mainly because I didn’t feel my head throbbing. But, this is take two and I am confident it will get better even though I feel it is a setback. Also, I did take out some statistics and I added the benefits for my patients, as I feel that is important if I want people to understand my mission and values. Please critique me as much as possible. I can’t fix what I don’t know is broken! Thanks. 😌
Vanessa,
ReplyDeleteI went back and watched your first pitch again. you did use a lot more statistics... I like this approach better. The use of the same statistic at the beginning and end was a great idea (wish I thought of that). I found it hard not to be monotone in my pitch, but I was anyway. I know it is especially hard not to be when you're sick. Overall, great job.